The Pirate Madeline Page 8 Random Everetti

Let's just say the explosions caught my attention and after reading what you have here I must say that I am hooked. So here I am now writing a critique. ^^

Story line: I really really like this story line thus far. It seems packed with butt-tons of action, humor, and my fave the Explosions! There aren't a lot of really great original Pirate manga out there other than the popular One Piece (which I found creepy) so this one looks promising!

Characters: We have not yet met all the characters, but I can tell you now from just reading your pages that I'm already attached to them. You even make the villains or "bad guys" likable which I think is fun is any manga. Your characters are well rounded, sexy, and full of action! I think that little turtle thingy is cute too!

Panel Placement: Excellent! Sequencing panels in the right way can either get your point across or make it seem like we're reading the funny pages in a newspaper (dull). Your panels are well placed and put an emphasis on just how much action your manga is about.

Art Style and Technique: Very Nice. Reminds me of the typical anime/manga we had in the 90's (nothing wrong with that). The style fits the story which is very important for manga in general. You cannot put Shojo art with a Shounen type story and vice versa. I think you did a fantastic job with the perspective, adding ever more to the action in your story. However, I think you need to work a little more on details when using perspective and a tiny bit more on anatomy. For example, when the box was coming down on Kanye the hands looked slightly off. And while Random was escaping on his motorcycle Kanye's legs looked a little too thick which made her look shorter. But the majority of your perspective is a ton better than most stuff I see.

Coloring: Fantastic! Especially with the metal objects and how they glare in the sun just perfectly. ^^

Overall, I have one more thing to say before I leave: Why is this a not an anime?! It's awesome!